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The sheets on my bed curl up around me,
unsticking from the mattress and kissing around my shoulder blades,
the line of my jaw. I'm just a drop of milk in this place.

Some thing out there gets to see into our houses.
Graces the block, seeing through our roofs,
past our clothes and sheets and ribs,
deep into the flesh of our heart.
Some one sees us there, laying quiet and unafraid.
He sees us, thinking we are naked, but he sees our shrouds
of secrets covering our private parts.
He knows what hesitation smells like. So do I.
He smells our hair. It smells like pine,
the longing of chimes
is wafting from our hearts.
And we have been seen.
about being seen

love,
aimee
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Given 2012-03-28
We have been Seen is a small, contemplative poem by ~vinesofsilver. ( Featured by wreckling )
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ReygarFaust Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Professional Photographer
Beautiful work! I love you!
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Feelin-free Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
WOW.... :D Love it!!!
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ino667 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
what dose this mean? Is it like a poem? Or a anime?
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vinesofsilver Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012   General Artist
Isn't anime drawing or animation? This is a poem.
It's my take on what it feels like to believe in a god that is all seeing and omnipotent. Particularly as a Christian, what it means to really believe in a god that is both powerful and compassionate and deeply intimate with out spirits.
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ino667 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah
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HungerGamesFan10 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm just wondering, was this inspired by The Secret World of Arrietty (or the borrowers)? I don't know why, but it reminds me of it. But, it is a beautiful poem. You totally deserved the dd. :)
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vinesofsilver Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012   General Artist
It was inspired by my relationship with and perception of God.

And thank you =]
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HungerGamesFan10 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
No problem. :) I hope that I will be as good as writer as you.
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vinesofsilver Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012   General Artist
That's really sweet. As long as you're sincere, I can't imagine anything going wrong =]
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HungerGamesFan10 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
well, the reason why i say that is that my stories never 'flow' correctly (the events do not fit, seems like it's slopped down) or never get finished. i make some poems, but they aren't as popular as this one. :(
but, i'll keep trying, and i hope i will make at least one good story some day. :)
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emo-gymnast Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's beautiful...congrats for the dd
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xoSoul Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Very beautiful, the way you have been able to let the reader envision the poem as they like is amazing.
Simple, refined, metaphorical, a stunning mixture. A very well-deserved DD.
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vinesofsilver Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012   General Artist
Thanks very much =]
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kilala909 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
This poem is wonderful~
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TRexyBusiness Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I enjoyed reading all the metaphors and imagery. There is something about this feeling that sounds almost indifferent. I don't know. I just know that I like it. It's wonderfully-written, by the way.
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Lit-Twitter Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
Chirp, congrats on the DD, it's been twittered. [link] :)
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That's one ugly emoticon. >.<
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RoseWolfeh Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012   Digital Artist
:eye:
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the-final-I Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:fear:
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